Historical Novelists’ Book Fair 12-15 April

Francine Howarth is hosting a four day Historical Novelists Book Fair for the period 12 – 15 April on her Romancing the Blog site.

Click on the link below to go to her site to find out more about the other other writers featuring in the book fair.  
http://ow.ly/jZ69F.

I have a series of novels called ‘The Lost King’ which concerns Edgar Atheling, the young man who should have been King of England in 1066. He fought against the Norman Conquest for much of his life and his story has been largely neglected. The third novel will be available soon.

‘Outcasts’ is set in the months following Saladin’s conquest of the Crusader Kingdom of Jerusalem. A family is torn apart by treachery.

‘Artful’ is about the adventures of the Artful Dodger after being transported to Australia. His skills and swagger are put under sore pressure.

I also have several collections of short stories including’ Mr Toad’s Wedding’, the winning entry of the international Kenneth Grahame Society competition.

If you’d like to read my books, and I hope you do, they are available world-wide on Amazon Kindle, Kobo, Nook, Apple, Sony Readers, Computers, Tablets and Smartphones.

My novels are priced at $2.99 or equivalent, my short story collections at 99 cents or equivalent.

Amazon.com: http://www.amazon.com/Martin-Lake/e/B004Z13HPA/ref=sr_tc_2_0?qid=1365863932&sr=1-2-ent

Amazon.co.uk: http://www.amazon.co.uk/Martin-Lake/e/B004Z13HPA/ref=ntt_athr_dp_pel_pop_1

Kobo: http://www.kobobooks.com/search/search.html?q=%22Martin+Lake%22&t=none&f=author&p=1&s=none&g=both

Nook: http://www.barnesandnoble.com/c/martin-lake

I plan to publish the following new books.

‘The Lost King: Mercenary.’ This is the third in the series about Edgar Atheling and will be available in the summer.

‘Beguiled.’ A story of a forthright and determined young woman at Henry VIII’s Court. Extracts of this appear on this blog.

‘Dodger at the Revolution.’

‘Outcasts: Princes and Peasants.’

EDITING: THE LONG DAY’S JOURNEY TO IMPROVEMENT

I never used to like editing my writing.  In point of fact, I didn’t really know how to edit properly. original_171221_3mHe3q6MhgSuNzpG9NpsnFzQG  I was always aware of Hemingway’s scatological description of his first draft although he seems to be working away quite happily in this picture.

My approach to editing changed when I bought two books by Sol Stein, ‘Solutions for Writers’ and ‘Solutions for Novelists.’  In these he outlined his approach to editing, including a very smart and powerful model using what he calls ‘Triage.’  In this you fix the biggest things first.  These include your characters and their motivation, scenes and overall flow of the story.  Then you should look at more general points including the language used, the rhythm of the piece, tightening up the story and inconsistencies.  Finally you should look at the nuts and bolts of the writing including imprecision of language, confusion in dialogue and things which interrupt the suspension of disbelief.

This is just a quick overview, I’ll say more about Stein’s approach in a later post.

But what is clear is that editing is a long process, that it takes several stages and it can be every bit as creative as the initial writing.

This is the process I use.

  1. My editing takes place even when I’m writing my first draft.  I re-read what I wrote the day before and fix anything which needs fixing.
  2. Once I’ve finished my first draft I leave it for a month or so.  This leaves me enough space for me to re-read it with fresh eyes.
  3. I read the draft quickly and note down anything which works well and doesn’t work so well.  Is the story strong enough?  Are the characters’ motivations realistic and clear?  Are there any parts where the story is sagging?  Are there themes which need to be heightened?  Are there any characters who shouldn’t be there or who are missing?  Are the chapters and scenes in the right order?
  4. Then I read it through more slowly, looking for weak style, repetitive words, confusion of narrative or dialogue.  I often find it useful to read out loud when I come across a troubling part.
  5. I then read the story in a different format.  First of all I use the Read function in Word.  This puts the manuscript into two pages which is more like a book.  It is surprising how different a view this gives.  I use this for copy-editing, particularly typos and punctuation errors.
  6. Then I transfer it to my Kindle and read it on this, making any changes as I go along.  I may also print it out on paper and look at the manuscript in this format as well.
  7. When I have made all my corrections I give the draft to my wife to read.  She is a skilled and tenacious reader.  We argue about plot, character and motivation which gives me good ideas on improving the overall shape of the novel.  And she has an eagle eye for typos and punctuation mistakes!
  8. I rewrite the manuscript again.  I read it on Kindle once more.  Then I publish.

The Start of a Life-Long Friendship. #SampleSunday #HistNov

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I was awake long before dawn on the appointed day.  I pushed Rip’s head off my chest and leapt out of bed.  ‘We are going to fight the Normans,’ I told him as I struggled into my clothes.  He yawned loudly.  I had told him this twelve dozen times already.  ‘I am the King of England,’ I told him, ‘and I lead my host to battle.’  He yawned and scratched at his ear.  ‘To battle,’ I cried, ‘to battle.’  He sprang up at my cry, first among champions, tail wagging furiously.  I led the charge down to breakfast.

I was hungry but could hardly swallow my bread and cheese so took them with me as I stepped out into the cold air.  It was still black night and stars glittered above my head.  I turned to the east but there was no sign of the sun.  Above the horizon a clear white star shone bright.

‘The morning star,’ said a voice.  ‘A good omen.’  The familiar shape of Oswald emerged and placed a hand upon my shoulder.  There was a second figure beside him, but not a tall warrior.  He came close and I saw that it was a boy of about my age, although taller and broader.

‘This is my son, Godwin,’ said Oswald.  I nodded at the boy and he nodded back.

‘I thought he would be a good companion for you,’ continued Oswald.  ‘But mind you keep yourselves out of trouble.  The army will march swiftly and I won’t have time to look out for both of you.  Be ready to ride at dawn.’

Oswald nodded and strode off in the night.  I stared in silence at Godwin for a little and he stared at me.  Finally he spoke.

‘Are you really the King of England?’

‘Yes.’

‘So I am your subject?’

‘Yes.’

There was a long silence between us.

‘But we can still be friends,’ I said at last.

Godwin nodded.  ‘I’m glad.  Herrig was my friend but he died of a fever.  He coughed up blood and a lump of black matter as big as an egg.  Then he died.’

‘Perhaps it was his soul,’ I said.  ‘The black matter.’

‘Or maybe the imp that was causing the fever,’ said Godwin.  He paused, as if realising that he had contradicted me.  ‘On account of it being black,’ he explained, quickly.

I did not answer for a moment.  I did not know what a king should do when he was contradicted by one of his subjects.  Should I insist it was a soul, even though I believed that Godwin’s idea was more likely?  Would he take it as a sign of weakness if I changed my mind?  What would Harold have done, I wondered?

‘I think you are probably right,’ I said finally.  ‘If it were black then it was more likely to be an imp than his soul.’  I paused.  ‘Unless, of course, Herrig was really evil.’

I heard Godwin say ‘hmm’ thoughtfully and I smiled.  ‘I don’t think he was that evil,’ he said at last.

‘So it must have been an imp,’ I decided.

I saw Godwin nod in the first glimmer of morning.

‘Let’s visit the horses,’ I said.

Godwin and I helped a groom saddle up my pony.  Godwin did not have a pony but I ordered that the grooms find him one.  This greatly impressed him.  By the time we had mounted the dawn had come, cold and clear, with a streak of red where the sun would appear.  My heart began to hammer in my chest and my head swam.  By this time several of my guards had joined us and they looked searchingly at me.  Could they hear the pounding of my heart, I wondered?  Would they think that I was a coward?  I tried to think of anything other than the coming battle but no other thoughts would stick in my mind.  I looked at Godwin.  He seemed as excited as I was.

‘How do you feel?’ I asked.

‘Excited,’ he said.

‘How do you know you are excited?’

‘Because my heart is pounding like a blacksmith at the anvil,’ he said.

I leaned towards him and listened.  I could not hear his heart at all.  I smiled in relief.

‘Is your heart beating as hard as mine?’ he asked.

I shook my head and gave as stern and unconcerned look as I could.  Godwin seemed impressed.

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The Lost King: Resistance is the first in a series of books about Edgar Atheling and his resistance to the Norman Conquest.  It is available from all e-book outlets.  The third book in the series will be published this summer.

Guest post for Harvey Black

Harvey Black has asked me to do a guest post on his blog.  I was delighted at this invitation.

I have written about my approach to writing about war.  As always, I learned a little more about my own writing by taking a look at my work through a different prism.

Harvey’s own field is more recent than mine, by a thousand years.  He writes about World War 2 and the Cold War.

Please take a look at my contribution and the rest of Harvey’s blog at:

http://harveyblackauthor.org/

 

Christmas 1066. The Lost King: Resistance. #SampleSunday #HistNov

Resistance.2012.coverOn Christmas morning Oswald woke me early and beckoned me to the window.  I glanced outside.  The sky was as grey as iron and as I watched snowflakes began to swirl.  By the time I got my clothes on the snow was layering the ground and the rooftops.  An unholy silence seemed to settle on the town.  Even the distant barks of dogs were muffled and no birds flew.  Godwin and I stared out at the cold whiteness.  Normally, I would have flung myself into the snow but this morning my heart was as heavy as a rock and I lingered mournfully in the doorway.  Godwin stood beside me, sharing my silence and gloom.

‘Come on lads,’ cried Oswald.  ‘Duke William will have me thrown in the river if you are late.’

Serving women came and sighed at the sight of me.  They made me strip my clothes off and adorn myself in fine linens and embroidered surcoat.  Lastly they wrapped a costly cloak around my shoulders.  Then one of my Norman guards came and fastened a sword around my waist.  I waited until he had gone before I pulled it from its scabbard.  It was blunt.

Oswald looked me up and down.  He did not say a word and I could not tell if he was pleased with me or not.  It was not like him to be so silent.  Then he nodded.  ‘Come on,’ he said.  ‘It is a long ride to the Abbey.’

We followed him out into the snow.  I was delighted to see that Leofwine, one of my favourite Housecarls, was waiting outside, holding the reins of my pony.  He helped me into the saddle and then we trotted along the river.  Waiting on the banks were the rest of my twenty Housecarls and with them a further forty Norman horseman.

‘You have a fine bodyguard,’ said Godwin, his eyes gleaming.

I nodded.  Our spirits were lifted by the sight of the warriors.

Slowly we trudged through the still sleeping streets.  The snow danced before our eyes like elf spirits in the woods.  Time seemed to have no sway and I could not tell whether we spent an hour or many hours in the saddle.

At length, up ahead, we saw the huge bulk of Westminster Abbey appear through the snow.  As we got closer, I realised that all the area surrounding it was crowded with Norman soldiers.  They were fully armed and looked watchful and nervous.  A few local men waited in the doorways of their homes, but there was no sight of their women or children.

We dismounted and entered the vastness of the Abbey.  It was like the mightiest hall of a king but twenty times larger. Huge torches flared upon the walls casting dismal shadows.  It looked as though the Abbey was full of giant ghosts, their bodies shifting and wavering in the cold draught.  I knew a spell against ghosts and was relieved that I could chant it if I had to.  But I guessed that the heavy smell of incense would banish any of the dead.  I had never liked the smell of incense and here there was so much that it clogged my nostrils and made my throat feel like wool.  The priests who swung the incense salvers droned out a miserable dirge all the while.  Perhaps they hated the smell as well.

I glanced up at the roof stretching far overhead.   The empty space made me feel naked and afraid and I turned my eyes back to the hall.  Half of it was empty but nearer the altar were about a hundred men and women, English and Norman.

‘We are not allowed to go any nearer,’ Oswald whispered to me.  ‘But we will be waiting here for you, never fear.’

Close to the altar was a small huddle of men, cloaked against the cold.  I was ushered up to join them.  Most were Normans, although I recognised only Bishop Odo and William fitz Osbern, a close friend of the Duke’s and his steward.

Also there was the traitor Archbishop Stigand, who gave me a winning smile.  I stared back at him as though he was a stranger.  Next to him was Earl Edwin who looked even more pale and drawn than previously.  And to my delight, there was his brother Morcar who gestured me over and made room for me to sit next to him.  My Norman guards seemed unhappy with this but did not wish to countermand the earl so contented themselves with crowding close in the bench behind me.

‘How are things with you, Edgar?’ asked Morcar.

I shrugged.  ‘I have been kept in a fine house.  My bodyguard Oswald has been allowed to stay with me and his son Godwin who is my friend.’  I turned and pointed them out to him.

‘And have you been treated well?’

‘Well enough.  They give me fine food and I drink wine instead of ale.  But I’m not allowed to go out without ten thousand Norman guards following me.’

Morcar chuckled.  ‘It is the same with me.  I am treated like the most honoured of guests but feel like a prisoner.  I am allowed to see no Englishmen at all.  Only Englishwomen.’

‘That must be really boring,’ I said.  Morcar gave a strange smile but did not respond.

‘And what about your brother?’ I asked.  ‘Do you see him?’

Morcar shook his head.  ‘This is the first time that I have seen him since we got to London.  He has been lodged at Winchester and I at Barking with Duke William.’

I grinned to myself.  It would upset Edwin that the Duke had sent him far away while keeping his younger brother close by him.  Either William preferred Morcar’s company, which was understandable, or considered him more of a threat.  Either way, Edwin would be angered.

A bellowing horn sounded in the Abbey and the Normans rose to their feet.  After a little moment Morcar did so as well and signed me to do the same.

All at once the chatter of the congregation ceased and the last dirge of the priests echoed against the walls and was snuffed out.  I turned and saw Archbishop Ealdred of York pacing slowly up the aisle and behind him, in full chain mail and a vast red cloak, Duke William.

At length they reached the altar and began a very long ceremony, some in Latin, a little in English but most in French.  I could speak French and followed it, but in the end I got bored.  All at once I thought of my dog Rip.  I felt terrible.  I had not seen him since the morning we left London to seek battle with the Normans.  That was nearly three weeks ago.  He must be missing me terribly.  I would have to seek permission from the Duke to go to find him.

At that point I noticed that there was a lull in the ceremony.  Then I saw a Norman priest walk up the aisle bearing a cushion with old King Edward’s crown upon it.  I narrowed my eyes.  There was only one person who should be wearing that crown, I thought.

The priest approached the archbishop who held the crown aloft above William’s head.  ‘People of England,’ he cried in a loud voice.  ‘Do you give consent that William should be crowned your king, lawful and anointed in the name of the saviour?’

I shook my head.  Only the day before, Oswald had told me that Duke William had decided upon this trick in order to claim that the people of England really did support him.  Real kings of England had not needed to seek this consent.  Harold had not and neither had I.

‘We consent,’ said the English gathered nearby.  I did not.

Then a Norman bishop stepped forward and cried out: ‘Nobles and warriors of Normandy.  Do you consent that William be crowned King of England and the English?’

A huge baying came from all of the Normans crowded in the Abbey.  The Abbey was so vast and empty that the cry seemed to take on a life of its own, crashing against one wall and back again as though a huge army was camped within it.

At that exact moment, the doors of the Abbey crashed open.  I turned in alarm.  Armed men rushed into the Abbey crying loud.  Some held drawn swords and some had burning torches.

‘Harold,’ I cried.  ‘Harold has come.

But it was not Harold.  These were Norman soldiers.  They hurtled up the aisle, swords waving, clamouring out William’s name.

Then, above the noise, we heard the Duke’s voice.  ‘Silence,’ he cried.  His voice was so loud that it carried far above the noise of the soldiers.  ‘Why have you entered this holy place with swords drawn?’

The Norman soldiers looked about them in confusion.

‘The fools think that the Bastard was in danger,’ said Morcar.  ‘They must have thought that the acclamation was some attack upon him.’  He looked around, thoughtfully.  ‘They must be as nervous as she-cats.’

At that moment, thick smoke began to billow into the Abbey.  William fitz Osbern ran down to the doorway and glanced out.  He came charging back up the aisle.  ‘Our bloody troops have set the nearby houses on fire,’ he cried.

Then he felled the nearest of the Norman soldiers with his fist.

‘I will not have this panic,’ cried William.  His face was scarlet with rage.  ‘Quench the fires.’

He glared at Archbishop Ealdred.  The old man did not respond for a moment and fitz Osbern pushed him forward.  He shook his head and placed the crown upon William’s head.

William jammed the crown further down upon his forehead and then stormed off to a side door.  He had only taken half a dozen strides when he turned and hurried back.  He grasped me by the shoulder.  ‘Come,’ he cried, ‘the whole of the Abbey may be engulfed.’

In a moment we were outside.  William stopped and stared at the flames which were fast destroying the nearby houses.  Screams of terror and pain cut through the winter day.  ‘I had not wanted my coronation to end like this,’ he said.  He stared at the burning houses.  ‘What a terrible way to die,’ he said.

I stared back at him, surprised at his words.

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The first two books of the Lost King series are available at all ebook outlets priced $3.00, £1.95, €2.68CDN$ 2.99  or thereabouts.

The third book, Warrior, will be available in 2013.

You may also want to look at my other novels. ‘Artful’ tells the adventures of the Dodger in Australia where he has been transported and London. ‘Outcasts’ is about the ordinary men who were knighted by Balian of Ibelin to defend Jerusalem against Saladin.

May I wish all readers of this blog a happy holiday season.

Back to England

Tomorrow we’re going back to England again.  This was our scheduled break to see my father, son and his family.  We had hoped to introduce my dad to my grand-daughter but because of dad’s double heart-attack he is still in hospital so that is no longer possible.

A disappointment for everyone.

Still, we’re seeing friends in London before going off to the West Country to see the family.  Looking forward to going to a BIG bookshop or two in London before we leave.

I love me Kindle and my Sony Reader but there’s nothing quite like the smell of a bookshop.

I’m using the wonderful wizardry of WordPress to post the next extract of my new novel on Sunday.  Getting very excited as I hope I’ll be able to keep to my (self-imposed) deadline of publishing the novel by the end of November.

 

Part 8 of my Crusades novel. #SampleSunday #HistNov

At that point John saw Alexius, the money-changer, and pointed him out, anxious to change the topic of conversation.

Alexius beckoned them over.  ‘Englishmen, if you have no other plans, please join me.  I leave tomorrow for Constantinople and may not see you again.’

‘Constantinople?’

‘Yes, I go to an important meeting.  I am part of a family enterprise which trades across the Empire and the Muslim lands.  My brother summons us all to account every three years.’

Agnes brought two more plates containing a rich stew with a strange aromatic smell.

‘What is this?’ John asked.

‘Goat cooked in spices,’ she answered.

‘It looks lovely.’

‘I wonder what it tastes like.’ Simon muttered when she had left.

‘It tastes very good,’ said Alexius.  ‘Agnes is a wonderful cook.  And she has a lovely arse.’

John stared at him in astonishment.

‘I can say this,’ said Alexius self-indulgently.  ‘I am an old man and young people allow me liberties.  Perhaps they shouldn’t.’

Agnes returned and placed a jug of ale upon the table.  ‘Young people also have good hearing,’ she said.  She grabbed a lock of the old Greek’s hair and shook it.

‘Ah,’ Alexius said, feigning dismay, ‘I am found out.’

‘You will be thrown out if my husband hears.’

Alexius chuckled.  ‘He comes now, Princess.  Here, Bernard.  I was just telling our English friends that Agnes has a beautiful arse.’

Bernard came over and gazed at his wife.  Then he leant close to Alexius.  ‘She has.  But unlike me, who can see her arse in all its naked glory, you can see it only through her skirts.’

‘How do you know I have not seen her exactly as you do?’ Alexius asked, his eyes narrowing.

‘Because I know that you are a creature of lies and fantasies.’  He tapped the old man lightly upon the cheek and took a sip of his wine.

Alexius laughed, his eyes, twinkling with mischief.

Bernard glanced at the Ferriers.  ‘How do you come to be eating with this old scoundrel?’

‘He changed some money for us,’ Simon said.

‘What?’  Bernard gave a sharp look at the old man.

Alexius opened his hands wide.  ‘The boys were with them.  I realised they were your guests.  They got a fair price.’

Bernard drew up a stool.  ‘See that they continue to do so.’

‘Of course,’ Alexius said.  ‘After all, they may be your relatives.’

‘Relatives?’  John glanced at Bernard.

‘Not mine,’ Bernard said.  ‘I’m a Frank through and through.’

He grinned and bent closer to them.

‘But my wife,’ he continued, ‘is descended from an Englishman; her great-grandfather, Robert.  He came to the Holy Land with a man called Edgar who claimed he was the rightful king of England.  Edgar was the heir of the ancient Saxon kings but William the Conqueror stole the throne from him.  Family legend says that Edgar was Robert’s father, though he did not realise this.’

John and Simon exchanged quick glances.  They had heard a similar tale themselves but had thought it a fabrication.

‘And Robert settled and raised a family,’ said Alexius.  ‘Here in Jerusalem.’

‘He had a child,’ said Bernard.  ‘Agnes’ grandfather.’

He gave a self-satisfied smile.

‘But that was not the end of the story,’ said Alexius.  ‘Robert was captured by the Saracens.  They must have realised he was the son of King Edgar even if his father didn’t.’

‘Whether or no,’ said Bernard, ‘Robert was killed for not renouncing his faith.’  He made a cutting motion against his neck.  ‘Bloody fool.  What does religion matter compared to your own neck?  The Saracens would have welcomed him, a man of his blood.  He might have even become an emir.’

Agnes had returned with a beaker of wine and a plate of food for her husband.

‘That old story,’ she said with a smile.  ‘That’s all it is, a story.’

‘Some stories contain a kernel of truth,’ said Alexius.  ‘Is not your own brother, Robert, named for your ancestor?’

‘If this story had any truth I wouldn’t be running around cooking food for old men and a hungry husband.  I’d be living in a palace and sleeping in a bed of finest feathers.’

She put the plate down in front of her husband.

‘Wonderful,’ Bernard said, wiping his hands upon his filthy apron and bending to his plate with enthusiasm.  He blew a kiss at Agnes who raised her eyes to the heavens.

‘With a headboard of cedar wood,’ she said as she went back to the kitchen.

Alexius passed Bernard a chunk of bread.  ‘What news, dear friend?’

Bernard looked around the room.  ‘It’s quiet, very quiet.  There are pilgrims true enough but it doesn’t make up for the army leaving the city.  My takings are down.’

‘You know where to come if you have need.’

‘Thank you.’  Bernard dipped his bread in the stew, turning it slowly to collect the juices.  He glanced up at Alexius with a questioning look.

Alexius raised his hand to stop him from saying more.  He turned towards the cousins.  ‘And how do the English like Jerusalem?’ he asked.

John paused.  ‘It is not as I imagined it to be.’

‘And how did you imagine it?’

‘I’m not sure now.  More ancient, more holy.’

Alexius laughed.  ‘It feels more holy now than when the troops are quartered here.  Much quieter at any rate.’  He helped himself to more wine.

‘You pilgrims think that Jerusalem is a place where angels fly and saints tread,’ said Bernard.  ‘In fact it’s where different worlds collide and it breeds both saints and demons.’

Alexius placed his hand upon John’s arm.  ‘Bernard is right.  As a pilgrim you must find grace where you can.  It does not reside in the stone walls of Jerusalem.  Perhaps it resides in your own heart.’

John felt his eyes moisten at the words and bent to his meal to hide it.  Can he read my soul he wondered?  Out of the corner of his eye he saw Alexius nod to himself.

‘And what of your news, old goat?’ Bernard asked.

Alexius stared out of the door at the streets.  ‘My scales are frenzied, Bernard.  The exchange is in turmoil, prices careering like wild bulls.’  He picked up his wine and peered into it as it seeking to find something within.

‘This is just a symptom,’ he continued.  ‘Rumour is bleak.’

‘What rumour?’ Simon asked.

‘Of anguish and of wars,’ Alexius answered.

‘The day we came to the city,’ Simon said, ‘we saw an army leaving by the same gate.  What was it?’

‘That was the army of Jerusalem,’ Bernard said.  ‘Every last warrior in the kingdom.  Twelve hundred knights and twenty thousand foot-soldiers.’

John frowned.  ‘And where are all these men of blood going?’

‘To defeat Saladin,’ Bernard answered.  ‘Or be defeated by him.’

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The novel will be published at the end of the month on Kindle, Nook and other e-readers.

 

Part 7 of my Crusades novel. #SampleSunday #Histnov

The next morning the Ferriers climbed up to the battlements by the Golden Gate at the eastern part of the city.

John had spent a restless night, tormented by the sight of Agnes in the courtyard and tormented even more by his thoughts concerning her.  It was imperative that he find some sense of salvation, however feeble.

They walked north for a few paces until John stopped and looked towards the east.  His hands grasped the stone of the walls as though he was holding on to them for fear of falling.

‘The Mount of Olives,’ he said, in a voice made thick with emotion.

The sun shone on the trees which crammed the slopes of the mount.  It looked a rich and wholesome place.  John felt he should avert his eyes from this and stare down instead to Gethsemane to try to snatch a glimpse of Christ’s agony the night before the crucifixion.

He bent his head and gasped.

‘It looks lovely,’ he said in surprise.

‘The mountain?’ Simon asked.

‘No Gethsemane.  I thought it would look bleak and awful, tortured by the memory of Christ’s anguish.’

‘You seem disappointed.’

‘I am.’  He shook his head.  ‘I came to Jerusalem to seek redemption for my sin.  How can I do this when the city is rich and pleasant, the sights a marvel and a wonder?’

Simon drummed his fingers upon the battlements.  ‘Perhaps you are misguided John.  Perhaps you can get redemption from things of beauty as much as from the ugly and the bitter.’

John shook his head angrily.  ‘Beautiful things are a danger, the snares of Satan.’

‘Yet God put them on the Earth.’

‘As a test.’

Simon sighed and closed his eyes.  ‘I can’t agree with you, John.  Beauty is to be enjoyed and loved.  Even Christ chose to spend his last night on Earth in the garden below.  Who are you to be different?’

‘I am a sinner.  Christ was not.’

‘We are all sinners.’  He smiled.  ‘I for one would very much like to sin with a certain woman.’

John straightened.  ‘Who do you mean?’

‘You know.’  He paused and grinned at John.  ‘The lovely Agnes.’

John did not answer.  His mind raced, his thoughts skittering like starlings in a flock.  ‘She is married,’ he said at last, coldly.

‘That does not stop her being beautiful.’

‘You must not think such a thing.  She belongs to another.’

‘That does not stop her being beautiful.’

’She is the mother of two children.’

‘That does not stop her being beautiful.’

‘We are guests in her home for God’s sake.’

‘That gives me opportunity.  And by the way, you just blasphemed.’

John was speechless with rage.  He turned away from Simon.  Christ help me, he thought, Christ help me.  Simon agreed to come on this pilgrimage with me, he has been my loyal and constant companion.  Christ help me, Christ help him.

His thundering heart began to calm.  He turned back to Simon and held out his hand.

Simon stared at it.  ‘What is this for?’

‘Take it.’

‘You offer me your hand as if you had done me wrong.’

John hesitated, desperately thinking of something to say to hide the truth.  ‘I offer you my hand because I love you and I do not wish you to seduce the lady Agnes.’

Simon smiled.

John could not tell whether it was a smile of friendship or mockery.  Or perhaps of gratification that he had guessed the state of affairs correctly.

After a brief moment Simon took John’s hand.

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They arrived back at the inn in time for the noon-day meal.  They were accosted by a blind man sitting by the entrance.  John pulled out his purse and began to search for a suitable coin.  Simon took the opportunity to slip straight into the inn.

As soon as he entered Bernard called him over.

‘I’m glad you’re here, Simon,’ he said.  ‘Some English pilgrims have arrived and they are drinking like they’ve never seen ale before.  I’ve told them to quieten down but they don’t understand.  Will you talk to them?’

Simon strolled over and listened for a while before returning.  ‘I’m sorry,’ he said, ‘I don’t understand them.  They speak English.’

‘But you are English.’

‘Yes.  But I only speak French.  Both my parents are of Norman stock.  John may be able to help, his mother was English.  He can speak the language like a native though he pretends not to.’

Bernard frowned.  ‘Is speaking English something to be ashamed of?’

‘It’s nothing to be proud of.’

Bernard shook his head.  He saw John walk in and hurried over to seek his aid.  Simon could see that John was reluctant but in the end he agreed and went over to the Englishmen and spoke to them.  There were lots of jeers and cat-calls but, nevertheless, they quietened down and even agreed to pay for the ale they had already consumed.

‘Thank you,’ Bernard said.  ‘Some of us in Jerusalem speak Arabic as well as French but I had not realised that it was the same in other lands.’

‘England is a bit like Jerusalem,’ John said.  ‘It was conquered by foreigners and now the English feel like strangers in their own land.’

‘He always says this,’ Simon said.  ‘But it doesn’t stop him acting like a Norman when it suits him.  Nor his brother Hugh who is one of Prince Richard’s right-hand men.  And you can be sure that Richard has little time for the English.’

‘So are you English or Norman?’ Bernard asked.

‘Our ancestor came over with the first King Henry,’ John said.  ‘He was an ordinary man, a blacksmith.   He never called himself English though.  His son, our grand-father was the first to do so.’

Bernard shook his head and pointed out the loud party of English pilgrims.  ‘And what would they think of you?’ he asked.

‘They would think we were their betters,’ Simon said.

‘But they’d be wrong,’ John said.  ‘We are no richer than they and have no greater power or influence.’

‘But we speak French, cousin,’ Simon said.  ‘And that still makes a difference.’

At that point John saw Alexius, the money-changer, and pointed him out, anxious to change the topic of conversation.

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The novel will be published in ebook format later in November.

Poor Knights and Princes. Part 5. #SampleSunday #HistNov

An example of the greatly debased later histam...

An example of the greatly debased later histamena: an electrum coin of the first years of Alexios I Komnenos (r. 1081–1118). (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

The old man turned his attention to the Englishmen once more.

‘You are pilgrims by the look of it.’  He picked up a bag and shook it.  ‘And I am by calling a money changer.’

He grinned and gestured them to sit on two stools next to his own.  ‘My name is Alexius Kamateros of Constantinople.  I can change any coin from east, west, south or north.  As friends of these boys, I give you the best rate in Jerusalem.’

‘We have English pennies,’ John said.

The old man nodded.  ‘That is good.  The English know how to make a coin.’  He spread his hands.  ‘I have to say that the older the better.  Since the Normans conquered the country the coins are not quite so fine.’

‘But still good?’

‘Oh yes, still good.  Better than Frankish coins or German or Saracen.’  He leaned close towards them.  ‘But not as good as those from the Empire of course.’

‘Alexius’ ancestor was an Emperor,’ Claude-Yusuf said.

‘Vespasian,’ Alexius said.  ‘A long time ago.  My people moved from Rome to Constantinople six hundred years ago.’

John and Simon exchanged glances, not knowing what to make of the old man.

‘You doubt that I am honest?’ he asked.

‘No,’ said Simon.  ‘I’m sure you are.’

‘More honest than the relic sellers, at any rate.’

He leaned close once again.

‘In the Street of the Palmers you will find only one honest shop,’ he continued.  ‘The rest will sell you a part of a sheep’s fleece and tell you it comes from John the Baptist’s wild and woolly head.  They will sell you a dried up old thorn and say it came from Christ’s crown.  They will sell you a rusty nail, or even maybe all three and claim you know what.  Why I have even seen one sell a rock and claim that it was used to stone Saint Stephen.’

Simon laughed.  ‘We shall watch out for them.  I have heard that an Abbot in France has a golden casket where he keeps the fore-skin of Christ.’

Alexius threw his hand in the air.  ‘I can purchase half a dozen of the same, in the one street.’

‘You say there is one honest shop?’ said Simon.

Alexius rose from his stool and bowed.  ‘The shop belongs to he with whom you now speak.’

‘Of course.  I should have guessed.’

Alexius sat down once again.  He sniffed, deciding what his next move should be.  ‘In the meanwhile, you want to change some money?’

‘I would like something smaller than a penny,’ John said.

Alexius produced a small scale as if from nowhere and placed three of John’s pennies in one pan and adjusted a small lever on the scales. He opened a bag and poured tiny copper coins into the other pan until the scales balanced.

‘This is the current rate,’ he said.  Then he poured more copper coins into the pan, causing it to sink to the table.  ‘And this is the rate for friends of friends.’

The noon bell rang and the old man plucked up his bags and scales and pulled down a shutter on his booth.

He turned to the cousins.  ‘Do you plan to stay long in Jerusalem?’ he asked.

‘We think so.’

The old man stared at them for a long time.  ‘Forgive me for saying, but I think that both of you should not stay here for long.’

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The novel will be published shortly on Kindle.

Forthcoming Talks with Fellow Authors

I’ve really enjoyed talking with fellow authors over the last five months.

I’m looking forward to forthcoming talks with authors.  They include MC Scott, Harvey Black, Ben Kane, Elizabeth Chadwick and Prue Batten with many others in the pipeline.

If you’ve missed any of the previous talks please check my previous posts.

The authors I’ve talked with already are:

David Gaughran, Ty Johnston, SJA Turney, Lynn Shepherd, Angus Donald, Gordon Doherty, James Wilde, Robyn Young, Douglas Jackson, Simon Toyne and N. Gemini Sasson.

The talks have been informative, illuminating and great fun.

Thanks to all past and future contributors to this series.