First Writings

I’ve just found something I had completely forgotten. It’s a little green notebook, tattered and stained and it contains the first poems I ever wrote.

I browsed through it and was intrigued, though not too much surprised, at how the things I wrote about then are similar to those I am writing about now. I’m fairly sure that the writers we loved when we were younger influenced what and how we write now (my series of talks with historical novelists shows how many were influenced by Rosemary Sutcliff, for example.) But it’s still something of a shock to find that the themes and issues which excited me when I was ten or eleven still fascinate me today.

Here’s the first poem I ever wrote. I was ten years old and I wrote it balancing a sheet of paper on my knee as I watched the Remembrance Day programme on the television.

Scarred with Red

Alas, the cream of Britain’s men are dead

And the fields around are scarred with red,

There’s Pete and Tom and Mick and Ned

There’s all my mates so very dead;

What can I do to help them now

Apart from make a solemn vow,

In days to come none shall forget

Those men their deaths so bravely met.

I am still fascinated by the First World War. I have written a collection of three short stories, ‘For King and Country’ which focuses on the pressures, sacrifice and courage of the participants in that terrible conflict. I am also planning a new novel set in those years.

The rest of my notebook shows the themes and concerns that still excite me: Warfare, injustice, blind obedience and the difficult fight against it, the seasons and the natural world.

Thankfully, I will share you any more of my Juvenilia.

It was later in life, when I was a young man, when I first began to write about clever young people fighting to make their way in the world against the hindrances and opposition of people determined to put them in their place. But that was, I’m sure, pretty much a working out of my own frustrations and aspirations.

Maybe my titles even hint at my favourite themes:

The Lost King: Resistance

The Lost King: Wasteland

The Lost King: Mercenary (to be published later this year)

Artful

Outcasts

My work in progress, about a very Machiavellian young woman at the court of Henry VIII will probably be called ‘Beguiled’. I don’t think I aspire to be Henry Tudor but I would like to know my protagonist Alice Petherton. In fact, I’m quite beguiled by her. She was originally only going to be a short story.

My Writing Space

I have lived in many homes and had a variety of writing places. I have found that those which seemed least pleasant often led to me being more creative and productive. I wrote my first collection of short stories crammed into a tiny dark place beneath stairs, my first novel hunched over a table in a dark corner of a room. When I set up my study to perfection I found myself perversely seeking out other places to write. Perhaps I know sub-consciously that that my work sometimes suffered in too perfect a setting.OLYMPUS DIGITAL CAMERA

I studied Neuro-Linguistic Processing, NLP, under Robert Dilts in California and he has a theory which perhaps explains this. He suggests that the best way to be creative is to use what he has termed The Disney Strategy.

There are three stages to the Disney Strategy. 1. Dreaming up ideas. 2. Turning the dream into reality. 3. Sternly evaluating and criticising what you have produced. You then go through the cycle again until you are happy with what you’ve produced.

Sounds familiar? Writers might call it Planning, Writing and Editing.

Dilts further suggests that different settings are best for each stage in the process.

  1. Dreaming up ideas. An open, playful space is best. Look up and allow yourself time and space to dream with a child-like sense of the possible.
  2. Turning the dream into reality. A well equipped space where you can really focus on the work with the best of equipment and without distraction. Lean forward to the task and get on with it.
  3. Evaluating and criticising. As uncomfortable space as you can find. Make yourself miserable and you’ll be more likely to discover your mistakes.

So here’s my current writing space. Or rather spaces.

I get my best ideas when I’m outside, on the terrace which overlooks the town and sea or, better still, in a café with the buzz of the world swirling past but leaving me undisturbed. My favourite place currently is the Cocoon Café where the owner and his waitress are welcoming and friendly. OLYMPUS DIGITAL CAMERA

As people walk past I scan their faces, conjuring up minor characters from their appearance and the things which appear to be concerning them. I also dream my best dreams when I’m lying down, in bed or in a reclining chair on the terrace. I look up at the skies and nothing can stop the ideas from flowing across me.

I turn my ideas into reality by working in the apartment. OLYMPUS DIGITAL CAMERAI use a good PC and have started to use some excellent writing software called Scrivener. I also have access to the finest research tool any writer could need, the world wide web. More than that, I have a circle of friends and colleagues from across the world, courtesy of this blog, Twitter and other social media.

The view looks over the town of Menton and Mediterranean Sea but I rarely find I am distracted by this. But to make sure I’m not I turn myself to the blank wall. The only thing I can see is a poster of a horseman from Siena on a mission from one town to another.

Sometimes, when the weather’s good like today I sneak out onto the terrace and write. OLYMPUS DIGITAL CAMERA

I evaluate and criticise by reading my work late at night. I would do it somewhere uncomfortable if I could but we live in a two room apartment and space is limited. Late at night when I’m tired and grumpy is about as good, or should I say bad, as I can find.

So there we have it. My work space. Or rather my working spaces.

I’m starting a series of author’s Work Spaces on this blog in a couple of weeks. I hope you enjoy reading about other author’s workspaces. I’m looking forward to it.

EDITING: THE LONG DAY’S JOURNEY TO IMPROVEMENT

I never used to like editing my writing.  In point of fact, I didn’t really know how to edit properly. original_171221_3mHe3q6MhgSuNzpG9NpsnFzQG  I was always aware of Hemingway’s scatological description of his first draft although he seems to be working away quite happily in this picture.

My approach to editing changed when I bought two books by Sol Stein, ‘Solutions for Writers’ and ‘Solutions for Novelists.’  In these he outlined his approach to editing, including a very smart and powerful model using what he calls ‘Triage.’  In this you fix the biggest things first.  These include your characters and their motivation, scenes and overall flow of the story.  Then you should look at more general points including the language used, the rhythm of the piece, tightening up the story and inconsistencies.  Finally you should look at the nuts and bolts of the writing including imprecision of language, confusion in dialogue and things which interrupt the suspension of disbelief.

This is just a quick overview, I’ll say more about Stein’s approach in a later post.

But what is clear is that editing is a long process, that it takes several stages and it can be every bit as creative as the initial writing.

This is the process I use.

  1. My editing takes place even when I’m writing my first draft.  I re-read what I wrote the day before and fix anything which needs fixing.
  2. Once I’ve finished my first draft I leave it for a month or so.  This leaves me enough space for me to re-read it with fresh eyes.
  3. I read the draft quickly and note down anything which works well and doesn’t work so well.  Is the story strong enough?  Are the characters’ motivations realistic and clear?  Are there any parts where the story is sagging?  Are there themes which need to be heightened?  Are there any characters who shouldn’t be there or who are missing?  Are the chapters and scenes in the right order?
  4. Then I read it through more slowly, looking for weak style, repetitive words, confusion of narrative or dialogue.  I often find it useful to read out loud when I come across a troubling part.
  5. I then read the story in a different format.  First of all I use the Read function in Word.  This puts the manuscript into two pages which is more like a book.  It is surprising how different a view this gives.  I use this for copy-editing, particularly typos and punctuation errors.
  6. Then I transfer it to my Kindle and read it on this, making any changes as I go along.  I may also print it out on paper and look at the manuscript in this format as well.
  7. When I have made all my corrections I give the draft to my wife to read.  She is a skilled and tenacious reader.  We argue about plot, character and motivation which gives me good ideas on improving the overall shape of the novel.  And she has an eagle eye for typos and punctuation mistakes!
  8. I rewrite the manuscript again.  I read it on Kindle once more.  Then I publish.

PUTTING ALL YOUR EGGS IN ONE BASTARD

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 “The first thing I do in the morning is brush my teeth and sharpen my tongue.”

Last week a few of us gave critic Rex Reed a very negative review. But there was one critic you’d feel almost proud to be savaged by. Her name was Dorothy Parker.

“She runs the gamut of emotions from A to B.” (a review of Katherine Hepburn’s acting style.)

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A life of comedy and tragedy.

Outcasts: Crusades 1 #SampleSunday #HistNov

My new novel ‘Outcasts’ is published as an e-book on Amazon and Smashwords. It will be available from other outlets later this month.  It is priced at $3.00, £1.93 and €2.20 or thereabouts.

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JERUSALEM 1185

The young man sprawled in the dirt, snatching at the spears which jabbed at him.

‘Get out, you filth,’ cried an old man from the edges of the baying crowd.

The spears prodded once more, driving the man to scurry away like a crab in the sand.  He turned, crouching low, and his powerful arms knocked away the points in vain attempt to prevent them stabbing him.

Beyond the spearmen a crowd of citizens watched in fascinated dread.

‘This is shameful,’ said one man, his eyes wide in horror.  ‘He should be honoured for what he did, not reviled in this way.’

‘You are right,’ said his companion, an aged Greek merchant.  ‘But tell me Bernard, would you allow such as him to enter your inn?’

‘Get out you filth,’ cried the old man once again and this time his cry was taken up by others in the crowd, their tight throats yelping like street-dogs.

The young man staggered to his feet, shielded his aching eyes from the burning sun.  He saw a young woman in the crowd bend to the ground.  She straightened, weighed a heavy stone in her hand and threw it at him.  Her aim was good and the stone smashed into his cheek, tearing at his lacerated skin.

This seemed to act as a signal.  Dozens of stones flew from the hands of the onlookers, pelting him with vindictive fury.  He did his best to shield his head from the missiles and staggered out of their reach.

‘He should be allowed to join the Order of Saint Lazarus,’ said the inn-keeper.  ‘He was a soldier of the King.’

The old Greek shook his hand.  ’True.  But he was not a knight.  Even lepers, it appears, are ranked by birth and blood.’

The young man halted a short distance from the crowd and stared back towards them.  One of the spearmen stepped from the ranks and approached him, flinging down a bundle of white linen clothing and a bell before hurrying back to his fellows.

‘Get away from us,’ cried the voices from the crowd.  ‘Get away, you filth.’

‘I shall do so,’ the young man called.  ‘I have no desire to live my life with you.’

He stooped to the bundle of clothes, and turning, limped off towards the desert.

The crowd hooted in derision.

 

 

 

The Land of Vain Regret. Part 3. #histnov #SampleSunday

This is the third part of my new novel which will be available in December.

Gerard and Claude-Yusuf raced into the room and headed straight for the cousins.

‘Shall we take you around Jerusalem?’ Claude-Yusuf asked.  ‘We are most excellent guides.’

‘Claude-Yusuf knows everywhere and everything,’ Gerard said with pride.

‘That sounds a splendid idea,’ Simon said.

At that moment Agnes walked in from the courtyard.

‘But only if your parents agree,’ John said hurriedly so that she could hear.

‘Agree to what?’ Agnes asked.

The two boys ran to her, each grabbing a hand and looking up at her with pleading eyes.

‘The English have asked us to take them round the city,’ Gerard said.  ‘We will be their guides.’

‘They have asked you?’ she said, feigning surprise.  Her eyes went to the young men.

‘In a manner of speaking,’ said John.  He felt his face redden.

Agnes glanced away.  ‘If you promise not to be a nuisance to the gentlemen,’ she said.

The two boys wriggled with excitement.  ‘We will, we will.’

‘I’m sure you will.’

She smiled at the men.  ‘Are you certain about this?’

‘We don’t know the city,’ Simon answered.  ‘We need experienced guides.’

‘I must see the church first,’ said John.  ‘That is essential.’

Ten minutes later Gerard and Claude-Yusuf dragged the cousins out of the inn and led them through a narrow alley way.  They were soon in the middle of a warren of streets and alleys.  They moved fast, darting up and down, turning corner after corner until the two adults lost any sense of direction.

After a few minutes they walked through an arch into an open space.

In the centre of the space was a vast church.

The Ferriers gasped.  They had never in their lives seen such a building.  It dwarfed anything they had seen or could have imagined.

‘I’ve never seen a tree as tall as this,’ Simon said.

‘I think it’s even bigger than Nottingham castle,’ said John.

Simon’s gaze went from one end of the church to the other.

‘I tell you what, I think the whole of the Goose Fair could be lost inside it and the city church as well.’

John nodded, awestruck.

The Church of the Sepulchre was made of glistening stone.  Its roof was covered with silver and two large domes with golden crosses appeared to float above the roof.

As John gazed upon it he felt as if he were being dislodged from his firm footing upon the ground, almost as if he dangled half-way between earth and sky.

He brought his eyes back to the ground, seeking for some sense of normality.

They were standing on the edge of the cobbled area in front of the church.  It was thronged with people and the tumult of their noise was overwhelming.

Some looked similar to the people they had seen when they entered the city.  Most looked like pilgrims from the west, travel-worn, filthy, staring at the glory of the church.

‘Well,’ said John, swallowing hard.  ‘You’ve brought us here.  Shall we go inside?’

He took Gerard and Claude-Yusuf’s hands and stepped through the porch into the church.

John was staggered by what he saw.  Every wall was hung with tapestries.  Gold figurines crammed every surface and the ceiling appeared studded with precious stones.  The clear light of day flooded the interior; it was as if he had stepped into the Heaven of his imagination.

His eyes followed the long nave and rested on a huge alter-piece.  His heart lurched at the sight of it.  He wiped his eyes, took a breath and started down the nave towards it.

The alter showed scenes from the life of Christ: his birth, childhood, ministry and sacrifice, carved from fine-grained dark wood.  John stared at the many faces of Christ in the screen.  He was overcome, believing this to be the very image of his saviour.

Beside the alter piece was a large plinth made of fine marble.  It was covered in flowers and small dishes of smouldering incense.  In the centre of it was a rectangular slit which had, by some miracle of craft, been incised deep into the marble.

‘What’s this?’ Simon asked.

‘It’s where the True Cross usually rests,’ Claude-Yusuf said.  ‘But King Guy took it with him in order to beat the Saracens.’

Simon smiled.  John recalled Bernard’s words about this and wondered at them.

‘Let’s go this way,’ Claude-Yusuf said, tugging at John’s hand.  ‘This is where dead people were buried.’

‘Is the tomb there?’ John asked.  ‘Where Our Lord’s body rested before he rose again?’

Claude-Yusuf shrugged.

‘There are bones there,’ Gerard said.  ‘Lots of them.’

‘Show me where Our Saviour was crucified first,’ John said.

The boys looked blank.  They had no idea that such a place existed in the city.

An old pilgrim had been listening to their talk from where he rested on a bench.  He reached out for John’s hand.

‘The place you seek can be found in a chapel above us,’ he said.  ‘Climb the stairs by the entrance to the church and you will arrive there.’

John thanked the pilgrim and turned to Simon.

‘I pray you cousin, will you take the children away for a while?  I need to see Calvary on my own and quietly.’

‘Of course,’ Simon answered.  ‘I understand.’

Simon bent down to the boys.  ‘I’d love to see where people were buried.’ He said. ‘And their bones.’  He had hardly straightened before he was whisked away.

John returned to the entrance and climbed up the stairs which led to the place of the crucifixion.  With each step his heart felt more deadened, his burden of guilt more heavy.

At the top of the stairs he paused, his hand upon the door.

Dare I go in?  Am I so reviled, so lost that I cannot sully this holy place?

He closed his eyes and tried to calm his heart.  He took a deep breath and stepped into the chapel.

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Part 2 of my Kingdom of Jerusalem novel #SampleSunday #Histnov

This is the second sample of my new novel which is set in the immediate aftermath of Saladin’s conquest of the city of Jerusalem.  If you’ve seen the movie ‘Kingdom of Heaven’ you’ll have a good understanding of the time and setting.

The huge gates were winched shut.  The crowd, which moments before had roared with joy at the departing army, gradually fell silent.  People turned and looked at their neighbours, elation fading from their faces.  The throng began to disperse.  Those who remained looked forlorn, almost embarrassed.  A pained silence descended upon them.

John and Simon gazed at the crowd in confusion.  It was the first time they had paid them any attention and they were shocked.

The men were swarthy and heavily bearded, a few with turbans.  The women wore veils and their arms shimmered with silver.

They can’t be our people, John thought.  Since landing in the Holy Land the cousins had paid little heed to the locals.  They had assumed that Jerusalem would be full of Europeans.  It appeared that they were wrong.  The people here looked unlike anybody they had ever seen before.

There was a sudden commotion behind them and they turned to see what was happening.

The two boys were clambering down from the shrine they had climbed to watch the army go by.  A priest with pale face and livid eyes grabbed the eldest by the hair.

‘You dare to stand upon a sacred shrine,’ he cried, slapping the boy across the face.

Simon stepped forward.  ‘Leave him alone,’ he cried.  ‘He’s doing no harm.’

‘Infidels must not pollute this shrine,’ said the priest.

‘I’m not an infidel,’ said the boy.

‘Liar,’ said the priest.  He clenched his fist still tighter and shook the boy’s head.  ‘What’s your name, infidel?’

‘Claude-Yusuf.  My father is a soldier.  He’s just marched off with the King.’

The priest slapped the boy once again.  ‘A half-breed.  Worse than an infidel.  I’ll have you whipped.’

‘You can’t do that,’ said Simon.

‘Can’t I?’  The priest held Simon’s gaze.  ‘I think you’ll find I can.’

‘He’s done nothing wrong.’

‘He’s a half-breed.  Whelped on a Saracen mother.  I’d slaughter the lot of them.’

Both boys began to wail.

John had not interfered until this point but he could stand by no longer.  He stepped up to the priest but Simon saw and blocked his way, preventing him from reaching the priest.

‘I have journeyed from England to Jerusalem,’ Simon told the priest, ‘and in all those miles I never thought I’d see such unchristian behaviour.’  He prised open the priest’s fingers.

The priest’s eyes narrowed.  ‘I shall remember you, infidel-lover,’ he said.  He strode off, his curses carrying on the air.

The boys wiped their noses.

‘Are you all right?’ John asked.

‘Yes.’

‘I am as well,’ said his friend.  ‘My name is Gerard.  Are you pilgrims?’

John nodded.  ‘We are.  We’re from England.’

The boys exchanged looks, this news of much greater interest than the recent assault upon them.

‘Is England in France?’ Gerard asked.

John shook his head.  ‘Certainly not.’

Simon bent down to the boys.  ‘You seem to like soldiers.  You were watching the army march past.’

‘Claude-Yusuf is for the Hospitallers,’ Gerard said once again.  ‘I’m for the Templars.  I shall be one when I get older.’

‘What about you, Claude-Yusuf?’ John asked.  ‘Do you want to be a Hospitaller?’

The boy did not answer.  He stared at the ground and twisted his toes in the dust.

Simon shrugged and held a penny up to the boys.  ‘Thank you for arranging such a magnificent welcome to the city,’ he said.  ‘We are going to stay at the Pilgrim Hostel.  Do you know where it is?’

‘It’s a long way from here,’ Gerard said.

‘A long way,’ said Claude-Yusuf.  ‘We know a better place.’

John raised an eyebrow, suspecting some trick.

‘The best inn in Jerusalem,’ Gerard continued.  ‘It’s much better than the Hostel.  Good beds, good drink and good food.’

‘It’s close by,’ added Claude-Yusuf.

Simon laughed.  ‘Then let’s take a look at this marvel of an inn.’

 ***

The two boys took the cousins’ hands and led them into a maze of alleys.  John feared they would soon be lost but in a few moments they found themselves at the inn.

‘See,’ said Claude-Yusuf, ‘I said it was close.’

After the glare of the streets the inn looked dark.  Better yet, it was cool.  A large room stretched in front of them with rough tables and benches dotted around in an ordered manner.  At the far end of the room a door led into a courtyard with small trees and shrubs.   Along the wall ran a counter stacked with barrels of ale and bottles of wine.  A woman stood behind this, cutting bread.

‘We’ve brought some pilgrims,’ Gerard called.  ‘From England.’

‘From England?’  The woman smiled and handed each of the boys a slice of bread.

‘You’re good boys,’ she said, glancing over towards John and Simon.

Her face was oval, with olive coloured skin and dark brown eyes.  Her hair was a tawny blonde, little darker than the colour of straw.  Two dimples played on either side of a tiny mouth.  John had never seen anything as lovely.  He cast his eyes downward, seeking to banish the thought from his mind.

Simon smiled at the woman.

‘My name is Simon Ferrier,’ he said.  ‘And this is my cousin, John.’

‘Welcome,’ the woman said.  ‘You must be tired.  Can I offer you food and drink?’

Simon nodded enthusiastically but John shook his head.

‘Not yet, I beg,’ he said.  His eyes remained fixed on the floor.  ‘My cousin Simon may wish to eat but before I do I must climb the hill of Calvary and see where Our Lord was crucified.’

The woman gave a fleeting smile and then frowned, wondering how best to answer.

‘To see that would indeed be a miracle,’ called a man from the courtyard.  He was of slight and wiry build, dark skinned with curly hair, a moustache and a wide grin.  His apron was covered in red and brown stains, some of them still wet.

Perched upon his shoulder was a small girl about five years of age.  He slid her to the floor and came towards them.

‘There is no hill of Calvary,’ the man continued.  ‘It was flattened and a church built around it.’

John was shocked.  ‘So we can’t see Calvary?’

‘Not a trace of it.’

‘And the cross?’

‘Oh you can see that; or a bit of it at least.  It’s in the church.  There’s a tiny fragment of timber buried in a cross of gold.’

John frowned.  ‘Gold?’

‘The churchmen felt that Christ would have wanted gold.’

The woman sighed and shook her head as if in warning.

‘The cross isn’t in the church now, father,’ Gerard said.  ‘The army took it and marched with it at the front of the column, the very front, just behind King Guy.  The army took the cross to go to war.’

‘Did they, indeed?’  The man looked troubled.

‘So they stake everything on this attack,’ he said almost to himself.

The novel will be published in December 2012.

A Labyrinth

I’ve been talking about mazes with a twitter friend recently.

I was reminded of a time a few years agowhen  I went on a training course given by Margaret Underwood, an expert in learning styles and educational Kinesiology from New Zealand.

She had brought along a huge piece of silk which on which she had traced a copy of the maze from Chartres Cathedral in Northern France.

One lunch-time she invited anyone who was interested to walk along the maze in silence.  I’m not at a religious person and not even a spiritual one but I decided to give this opportunity a go.

My friend Ross Cooper and I started off side by side.  We walked together a little space and then turned a corner.  From that point on we each trod our own individual path.

I walked on in silence, musing on how my feet were being led by a path whose end I could not see.

I turned and was astonished to see Ross at the far end of the maze, out of reach, unreachable.  I felt alone, almost bereft as he silently paced away from me.

I bent my footsteps once again and continued.  A few minutes later I looked up and saw Ross only a few steps from me, walking towards me.  I felt relieved, only to see him take a sharp turn and disappear from view.

This is like life, I thought.

I had got it.  The idea of the labyrinth.

A few minutes later I turned a corner and found myself walking side by side with Ross once again.  We reached the end together, as we had started.

I have heard that the maze was designed as a symbol of a person’s life.

I was moved by the experience, intrigued and thoughtful.

I’d like to walk it again one day.

A new cover for ‘Artful.’

Today I decided to change the cover of my novel ‘Artful.’

It’s a shame because I liked the cover but I knew that I could improve on it. The old cover was too busy and did not immediately capture the essence of the book.

I’ve spent a frustrating time trying to get to grips with Gimp and finally, after lots of experiments, I finally got a cover I liked.  It should appear on Amazon some time tomorrow but I thought I’d give readers of the blog the first look at it.

It captures the fact that the book is about The Artful Dodger, which was not immediately clear in the earlier cover and that he has been transported to Australia.

It also captures his exuberance and sheer cheek, both of which are much in abundance in the book.

For a limited time ‘Artful’ is available for $1.25 or 77p.  It’s also available for free loan for Amazon Prime customers.

My goodness, just checked on Amazon and the new cover is up and running already.  I hope you like it.